And how do I intrigue the
reader/agent/publisher to read the book? What "hook" can blend the
two massive plots into 1 or 2 sentences? At this point, I have this:
"For two thousand years, rumors of
a curse upon the royal bloodline had merely been fiction. However, Private Keatep
Brendagger, a young female soldier, witnesses the destruction of the last queen
of Athelstan in a dream. Upon the arrival of a dashing young man named Ikane
Ormand, she discovers that she is of royal descent and has inherited the same
blight. Keatep is framed for the murder of King Myron and the realm becomes
war-torn by the Black Serpent Pirates. With the persistent help of Ikane, she
struggles to break the curse and finds herself unintentionally falling in love
with a man she had been instructed to revile."
However, it seems to lack the
agonizing battle between Keatep and the Phoenix Witch. Overall, the curse and
the love between and Athelstanien soldier and a Black Serpent Pirate is the
books core.
I have been reading so many blogs from agents/authors
suggesting this and that... my head is spinning! Maybe I need to take a few
days off.
I know your frustration!!! I have found that opening a query letter with the most exciting scene is best. It leaves the reader wanting more. It is also good if you can hook something with the book that connects you to the story. It seems that publishers are always looking to sell an author as well as a book. Good Luck! --Diane Mayer Christiansen
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